WALT write a timed recount about a time
when we did something special with our whanau or family.
Write about:
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when and where you did something special
·
who was with you
·
what you did (think about the order you did things)
·
how you felt and why you felt this way.
By Lillian
Fairbrass
On the great
Christmas Eve, me and dad put up the Christmas tree. We had to sort out all the
decorations before putting them on. I could smell cookies. Mum was cooking some
cookies for the big party on Christmas Day. Claudia was sick. I gave her some
medicine. It was strawberry flavour. She said “Yum in my tum.” Then me and dad
put the decorations on the Christmas tree. Then we put it outside and lit it
up. It looked beautiful. Then mum gave me a cookie. I felt very proud because I
lit up the Christmas tree and turned the switch. It was at my house. I did it
with my mum, dad and sister which I love. Then my cousin came around and gave
me and Claudia our Christmas present. It was a torch and a toy monkey. I loved
it.
Next
steps
When writing about yourself and someone
else, remember to put yourself last e.g. Dad and I … Claudia and I …
Try to join some of the shorter sentences
together and use some descriptive words so the reader has a clear picture in
their mind.
