WALT write a timed recount about a time when we did something special with our whanau or family.
· when and where you did something special
· who was with you
· what you did (think about the order you did things)
· how you felt and why you felt this way.
By Lillian Fairbrass
On the great Christmas Eve, me and dad put up the Christmas tree. We had to sort out all the decorations before putting them on. I could smell cookies. Mum was cooking some cookies for the big party on Christmas Day. Claudia was sick. I gave her some medicine. It was strawberry flavour. She said “Yum in my tum.” Then me and dad put the decorations on the Christmas tree. Then we put it outside and lit it up. It looked beautiful. Then mum gave me a cookie. I felt very proud because I lit up the Christmas tree and turned the switch. It was at my house. I did it with my mum, dad and sister which I love. Then my cousin came around and gave me and Claudia our Christmas present. It was a torch and a toy monkey. I loved it.
When writing about yourself and someone else, remember to put yourself last e.g. Dad and I … Claudia and I …
Try to join some of the shorter sentences together and use some descriptive words so the reader has a clear picture in their mind.